R200603674 Eun-Jin Hyun
An Experience with the Worst Waiter
Service position can be more difficult than just making practical merchandises since it requires strong mental strength. Customers, however, do not consider their effort as an option but as a mandatory. Therefore, meeting a very rude waiter is quite a displeasing event leaving an unforgettable impression. Russia, where it still has its communism traits, is a place easy to find the worst waiters someone could ever imagine. When I was in Novosibirsk, a city in middle of Siberia, there was a family restaurant which looked like the Russian version of "Outback Steakhouse." With my Chinese friends, as we entered the restaurant a blonde hair waitress with emerald green eyes stared at us with a very dismal face making us even sorry to interrupt her break. Without moving her facial muscle, she asked us bluntly whether we wanted the smoking area or not. After we were seated, we asked for any recommendations and the reply from the doll-like waitress was very simple and precise.
"All." She mumbled.
Trying to mask our frustration with a grin, we ordered a smoked mutton dish and a beef tongue. After 30 minutes we got our meals but found a dead fly lying along with asparagus on my dish. Immediately, although my Russian speaking skills was very limited, I complained to that waitress for a refund or a new dish. However, this pretty waitress suddenly thrust a finger before me and swiped the fly away.
"Now it's clean. You can eat it now. You're not going to die anyway." She said, with obvious irritation in her voice.
We were so mad but had no choice to keep silent since there were three guards in black uniforms staring at us. They were about to roar at us if we just spat a single word. Except the dish which had a fly, we did eat our supper and paid reluctantly. Because of the rude service, we did not want to give any tips, so we just swiftly left. As soon as the door was closed, however, we heard the waitress's voice shouting at us.
"You got all the service and this is what you pay for? Don't you ever come back!" She yelled furiously.
As she warned us, we never went back or even close to that restaurant. Thanks to this waitress, I have learned that meeting polite waiters can be a hard chance sometimes.
How to Throw a Surprise Birthday Party for a Friend
By just shouting the word "surprise" can make a normal party into something special and unique. For those, especially high school students who want to make it more dramatic with less money, several steps are recommended to follow. First, a fight between best friends is crucial. Making a group fight and urging the birthday girl or boy to choose one side would be effective. At this point, the birthday person gets frustrated by seeing their friends getting into a severe argument and completely forgets about the birthday. The thing he or she might only consider is how to solve this problem. While the birthday person is caught in mind, one team gets the cake and some birthday crackers and for distraction, the other starts to blame the birthday person for not mediating. The birthday person may get upset and have another quarrel as scheduled. Before it gets worst like a physical fight or insulting, the friends would end the argument in a very silly way, such as saying "I got angry because I was just practicing for the Oscars!" Then as soon as possible bring up the cake and crackers to the site and shout "Surprise! Happy Birthday!" All that is needed is just a small cake, a few crackers with beloved friends who are good at keeping secrets.
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ReplyDeletewhat I like about this piece of writing is how you express the situation and the variety of words you use.
Your main point seems to be that you had a terrible waitress in a foreign country.
These particular words or lines struck me as powerful: "They were about to roar at us if we just spat a single word." Because it shows how much you were afraid of the body guards despite the fact that you were angry. So it sounds kind of funny.
"thrust a finger before me and swiped the fly away" I liked this part because it shows in detail what kind of attitude the waitress had.
Some things aren't clear to me: "Without moving her facial muscle" because it sounds kind of Koreanish. "Trying to mask our frustration with a grin" Does it mean you were pretending to smile although you were angry?
The one change you could make is try to think in English not Korean
2. What I like about this writing is that you show in detailed steps how to throw a surprise party.
Your main point seems to be showing how to throw a surprise birthday for a friend.
These particular words or lines struck me as powerful: "fight between best friends is crucial"
Because that's what I thought myself! "I got angry because I was just practicing for the Oscars!" sounded funny because it makes me imagine what the situation would be like.
Some things aren't clear to me: "Before it gets worst like a physical fight or insulting" What kind of insults? "Then as soon as possible bring up the cake and crackers to the site " site doesn't sound right.
The one change you could make is using imperatives.
-Hyun Kyoung Cha 200603322
An Experience with the Worst Waiter
ReplyDeleteI think your main point seems to be the worts waitress you have met when you were in Russia. The thing I liked about your writing is the topic sentence. I totally agree with you about the fact that service job being a difficult position. I also liked how you described the facial expressions of the waitresses, it was easier for me to understand how you felt that day just by the adjectives. But I wasn't quite clear about the waitress. Is the "blonde hair waitress with emerald green eyes" is the same person with the "doll-looking" one?? I think this paragraph would be much better if you shorten it a little bit, but in a whole I enjoyed reading it!
How to Throw a Surprise Birthday Party for a Friend
I think you are talking about way of throwing a birthday party for your friend. What I liked about this writing is that you've chose one particular way of throwing a party(pretend to fight), which was easier for me to understand then just a blur image of a surprise party. I also liked the line "I got angry because I was just practicing for the Oscars!" I think quoting is just easier to understand the situation than explaining. In this part "Before it gets worst like a physical fight or insulting, the friends.." which side friends are you talking about? Because you said friends get into teams, it was little bit confussing. I think this writing would be better if you can put it in a little bit clear steps. I liked it overall.
An Experience with the Worst Waiter
ReplyDeleteI think your main point seems to be the worts waitress you have met when you were in Russia. The thing I liked about your writing is the topic sentence. I totally agree with you about the fact that service job being a difficult position. I also liked how you described the facial expressions of the waitresses, it was easier for me to understand how you felt that day just by the adjectives. But I wasn't quite clear about the waitress. Is the "blonde hair waitress with emerald green eyes" is the same person with the "doll-looking" one?? I think this paragraph would be much better if you shorten it a little bit, but in a whole I enjoyed reading it!
How to Throw a Surprise Birthday Party for a Friend
I think you are talking about way of throwing a birthday party for your friend. What I liked about this writing is that you've chose one particular way of throwing a party(pretend to fight), which was easier for me to understand then just a blur image of a surprise party. I also liked the line "I got angry because I was just practicing for the Oscars!" I think quoting is just easier to understand the situation than explaining. In this part "Before it gets worst like a physical fight or insulting, the friends.." which side friends are you talking about? Because you said friends get into teams, it was little bit confussing. I think this writing would be better if you can put it in a little bit clear steps. I liked it overall.