Wednesday, June 30, 2010

Week2 First Draft/ Kim Juhee

200703910 KIM Juhee

 

My Favorite Cousin

 

I have many cousins, but most of them are younger than me. So I usually have to take care of them, or sometimes help them to study or do assignments. It sometimes bothers me, to be honest, but I know that I should do it because that's what my cousin sister has done for me.   There is only one older cousin sister for me, and I love her so much. She's 3 years older than me, but she has always been like my best friend. She is very humorous. Whenever and wherever my relatives gather together, she leads conversations and makes everyone happy easily. She knows many funny stories of herself or her friends, and her way of telling the stories makes them much more fun. So she gets along with old people very well, and also she's good at taking care of kids. And she is a very optimistic person. Even when she failed to pass some exams or couldn't get a job, everyone worried about her. But she always said she's ok and that she is just going to try harder than before. At last, she got a job in a library which she wanted, and everyone was so happy about that. Above all, she's very considerate. When I was a child, I was a quiet and shy kid, spending most of time at home alone. She and I lived in the same apartment at that time, and she started to take me with her hanging out with her friends. At first I didn't like her doing that kind of things, but as time goes by, I realized that she was trying to make some friends to me. Thanks to her efforts, I could make many friends and my personality changed a lot. We again are living in the same apartment now, but since I'm staying in Seoul, it's hard to hang out with her recently. But she's still my best relative, sister, and friends of my mind.

 

 

How to Obtain a Driver's License

 

Many Korean people want to get driver's license as soon as they can, because driving is such a useful skill to learn. But as we all may know, driving can be so dangerous that we have to learn it with much care. Here are the steps we should take to learn how to drive and obtain driver's licenses. First, we have to register for a driving institute. It is also possible to learn how to drive from your family members or friends and take a test, but I do not recommend it. Since those people are not professional teachers, they are not likely to teach you many situations you have to deal with on the streets. So it is better to use institutes. When you are done registration, you will receive some books to read through. Firstly, you should study that book to take a written test. The test is needed because before you start driving, it is essential that you know the basic rules and signs on the streets. Only after you pass the written test, you can start driving inside the institute. Beware that you are not yet allowed to drive outside, because you don't have a license. The courses in the institute consist of easy roads and some complicated ones like S-shaped course or parking lots. You can practice there several times and then you can take a test. It is usually not so difficult because it's the same course where you practiced many times. After you pass it, you can finally go out to the real roads. But it still does not mean that you can drive on the roads by yourself. You must accompany your instructor beside you, or it is very likely for you to get in some trouble. With the instructor's help, you can learn how to drive on the roads safely. After a few days of practice, you finally can take the final exam on the roads. You should observe all the traffic signals, speed limits, and many other things. If you pass it, you can finally obtain your own driver's license, meaning that you get the right to drive.

 

2 comments:

  1. 200603322 Hyun Kyoung Cha


    1.
    What I like about this piece of writing is that it shows how much you like your cousin.
    Your main point seems to be that your cousin is like your best friend.
    These particular words or lines struck me as powerful: "It sometimes bothers me" I sometimes get bothered too when looking after cousins younger than me!
    Some things aren't clear to me: "my personality changed a lot." How did it change?
    The one change that you could make is using a few more adjectives.

    2. What I like about this piece of writing is that it shows in details how to get a driving license.
    These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:"It is also possible to learn how to drive from your family members or friends and take a test" Oh! I didn't know that you could!
    Some things aren't clear to me: "it is very likely for you to get in some trouble" What kind of trouble?
    The one change that you could make is using more imperatives.

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  2. 1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it is very cohesive, thus appealing. Your main point seems that you like your cousin and how she became your best friend. I like "Her way of telling stories makes them much more fun" because this sentence adds details to her personality. However, I don't get the meaning of the last part of the essay: "Again we're living in the same apartment but since I'm staying in Seoul, It is hard to hang out with her recently." Does that mean you are not living in Seoul but in somewhere else? The one change that might make the improvememt is to categorize and state the reason why you like her clearly like her personality, her influence over you, etc..

    2. What I like about this piece of writing is that it shows steps of how to obtain a driver's lisence clearly. Even though I don't know how to get a driver's license, I could imgine it, follwing the procedure that you presented. I like concluding sentence best because it well sumps up the main point. This sentence, "It is very likely for you to get in some trouble" is not clear to me neither. It makes me wondering what kind of troubles waiting ahead? The one change that could make improvement is that including more examples that are appealing.

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